Revisions

I received plenty of great critiques on my essay from my peer review. I would like to improve my essay by making it longer, adding more personal experience, detail, and possible adding another perspective I found within “Generation A+.” I also would like to improve on the little typos, punctuation mistakes, and minor structuring errors in my sentences that were brought to my attention. I would like to truly improve on making my thesis clearer and more evident to my readers. Also while agreeing with Britt’s opinion on this generation and their feelings on education, I would like to add more of my personal experiences through my years of education. One last thing I would like to see in my final essay would be my prospective on the other side of the argument. I think by stating both sides and ho I feel might make the reader understand why Britt is saying what she is and how it relates to us as a whole. I would also like to try and make my sentences more understandable and less run-ons or minor punctuation errors. Other than fixing these few minor details in my essay, the critique I received was very helpful and gave me an outer perspective on what should and should not be added to my essay.